fireclaw ([info]vinforspi) wrote,
@ 2007-02-25 18:23:00
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Current mood: hyper
Current music:Matsumoto Rika ~ Challenger!
Entry tags:d7, delirium, fanfiction, mai hime, shiznats, writing

omgee--tis D7!
So...I got over my block of fireclaw! How? Why, music of course! More specifically, one of the Japanese theme songs of Pokemon! Do not doubt the power that ish of Pokemon! It is rabid and spreads like a disease! o_O Whooooo! Andand when you loop it around for hours and hours...insanity! ~giggles like a maniac~ if a pikachu suddenly appears in the fic...you'll know what happened.

So yeah, hah! I finished D7 during break--doesn't matter if it's the last day, I actually posted something up when I said I would and not months weeks a little later! I spent most of today forcing myself to finish it. Which is why I still have a sociology paper to write...no matter!

It's a bit odd for me to post out something the same day I finished it. But, well, I feel it made up for it being nearly two months since an update. 'scuz the likely more-than-usual-stupid-grammatical mistakes kudasai!



Manga notes:
-Nao's original Key was this supaa motto motto takusan ugly, creepy creepy guy who was CUT TO PIECES by either Mai/Tate/Natsuki/Duran/Kagatsuchi. I don't remember. (CORRECTION: It's Miyu as a really cool person was brave enough to check) Then Takeda becomes her Key. The guy Nao's with in D6 tis not Takeda.
- I think there was something that actually was important to the chapter, but I forgot it. Hopefully it'll come to me soon.

Other notes:
-Anchin ish the monk-duude that Kiyohime was in love with, according to the myth. For more info, just google and look around.







It couldn’t have been more dramatic.

There three woman stood on top of the fifteen-storied department on a warm summer’s afternoon. Two of them stood close together; their green eyes turned towards the third figure with a fixed expression of surprise and fear which no doubt also ran through the rest of their bodies, tingling in their very spines. In their hands they held their respected, formidable weapons.

They had been fighting, these said two women. The rooftop of the building was scarred by their attacks. There lay strands of red wire that had been shot off. There sat a patch of ice that reflected brightly, mercilessly in the noonday sun. It had been a fast-paced battle with both combatants equally matched. The one with the claws had suddenly brought back her arm, ready to shoot it forward and let the wires connected to the nails of her Element slice through anything in its path. The one with the tiny revolvers had hers trained on the other’s head and torso; she had finally saw an opening in her adversary’s defenses. However, all that had fallen from their mind the moment the final figure had suddenly materialized onto the battlefield.

The third woman’s hands were currently bare. No weapon was held in her callous hands. She was deadly calm, cold like the touch of frost upon a soon-dying flower. Her wine-colored eyes were unfocused as if she wasn’t able to see, yet it did not matter to her. Who needed clear sight when one had power?

And then she threw her arm out in a single, earth-shattering movement. The air around her crackled with energy and then came the all-too-familiar sound of an Element appearing. A gleaming, foreboding red naginata appeared in her hands.

This woman then broke the uneasy silence with a single word—a name—that pierced through everything like razor-sharp spear, permeating the very laws of their universe:

“Kiyohime.”

And then, the fourth figure appeared. Her ingression was languid like the movement of an arrogant predator who knew everything would change the moment she appeared. That once she did, the scene would shift and all her prey would rush away, trembling at her mercy. Slowly she emerged from behind the third woman: first came her head framed by a crown of dark purple hair; then her torso; and by the time she had fully surfaced, the two facing her realized how inhuman she was.

No longer was there the pretty but plain face of the ghost of an innkeeper’s retribution seeking daughter. In its place was the face that one could only describe as “monstrous.” Her eyes were pupilless, glowing yellow fully engulfed both eyes. The deathly pale skin covering the ghost took on a light purple tint and became scale-like. The kimono she wore was sprayed out and in tatters, flapping in an invisible wind along with her long hair. Her mouth was elongated; the pointed canines in her mouth had grown tremendously.

From behind the golden brown hair of the naginata-wielding woman, the monster’s glowing eyes bore into the blue haired HiME's and her mouth was curled into a pleased smirk, taunting the other with the prize she had ensnared.

And so, it began.

*~*~*~

Natsuki took a step backwards in disbelief, staring at the woman she had known for most of her life now contorted into someone she couldn’t recognize. The chilling aura, the apathetic expression on Shizuru’s face made her feel distant and unlike the Shizuru who always smiled so warmly at her. Who was this?

And then, that thing behind her…it almost was as frightening as Shizuru in her current state. The way she looked at her made her shiver. Oddly enough, she caught a flicker of hatred in those yellow eyes as if the monster despised her. It, however, soon gave away to a pleased expression. Like she had won something tremendous.

By this time, Nao had snapped back from her shock.

“What the hell?” She snarled, looking back and forth from her to Shizuru. “I don’t know what’s happening, but I want nothing to do with it.”

Shizuru’s head tilted to the side and she smiled calmly. “But Yuuki-san, that is impossible—you are a part of this. You are smart enough to know you would pay the repercussions the moment you touched what is mine.”

“What’s yours?” Her head snapped back to look at Natsuki and then back to Shizuru in disbelief. “Leave me out of your twisted lover’s quarrel. Speaking of twisted, what is that thing behind you?”

“My, you’ve never seen a Child?” Shizuru said humorlessly.

“Child? You call that thing a Child? Even if it was, you’re not a HiME.”

“Perceptive as always, Yuuki-san. I am not like you or Natsuki. I never was.” There was only a faint echo of bitterness in her otherwise hollow tone. Shizuru turned and touched Kiyohime’s face with her free hand. “I am merely borrowing this one’s power.”

“That still doesn’t make any sense.” Nao said, growing more and more annoyed. This wasn't how she planned to spend her Saturday.

“Does it not?” The other replied nonchalantly with in a voice that no longer sounded human. Like she had transcended the gap, the frequency that the current world operated in, and stood between the planes of the dead and the living.

“Shizuru, what happened to you?” Natsuki said, no longer able to stay silent.

There was a pause as the person in question turned slightly, listening to the whispers of the monster behind her that only she could hear.

“Ara ara, does Natsuki finally care about me?” The other then replied with none of her usual spunk.

Before she could answer, Nao had summoned her Elements again and rushed forward with her claws outstretched.

“I've had enough of this tirade. I don’t know what’s happening, but I’m sick of it,” the other brazenly replied as she ran towards where Shizuru stood.

Natsuki cursed to herself and called forth her tiny revolvers again. If Nao had any weakness, it would be that her impudence that exceeded even her own. To an extent, Natsuki knew when to stop and retreat while Nao, once angered, would keep going even if she was outmatched.

Once Nao had moved into range, Shizuru swept her blade in a quick, horizontal arc. It effectively caused the other to abandon her course and roll to the side in order to avoid being hit. The redhead landed with one of her knees touching the ground and, when she recovered, the younger girl threw herself forward again. This time she was ready. When the Kyoto native swung her naginata again, Nao ducked and reached forward, pulling the shaft down towards her, her elbow colliding with it painfully. It was a risky move and had she timed it wrong, the blade would’ve sliced through her back. However her sacrifice was well used as her other claw, wires out, whipped forward and lashed at the older woman’s face and upper torso.

Unfortunately for Nao, that exact moment Kiyohime appeared in front of Shizuru. The wires collided with her scaly form causing the ghost to hiss and swipe at her. She blocked the surprisingly solid hand and was forced to retreat backwards, losing the advantage she had at a close distance.

Natsuki was about to intervene when she saw the monster turn slowly to face her as Shizuru moved through the ghost and towards Nao. Kiyohime smiled monstrously and she quickly fired in her opponent’s direction. The ghost disappeared and reappeared next to her, face to face. For a moment she was eye to eye with the beast whose hands almost touched Natsuki’s own. This caused her to lower her weapons in surprise. She could feel the cold breath of the “adopted Child” on her face and the pure hatred that radiated from her entire form. She almost shivered. Almost.

Instead she threw a kick at the ghost which passed through the body as if it was air. Kiyohime then moved to the side and swung her arm at Natsuki who promptly blocked it with her left forearm. She continued to trade blows with the monster with little avail though she managed to avoid getting hit. That was until Kiyohime decided she had enough and appeared behind Natsuki, wrapping her powerful arms around her, crushing her with her inhumanly strong hold.

Thinking fast, Natsuki quickly spun her guns so that the muzzle faced behind her and fired rapidly. Those hate-filled eyes widened in shock as Kiyohime was quickly encased in a block of ice.

Natsuki took the time to move away, all the while firing more shots at the currently frozen being. She had to move farther. Part of her wished she could call Duran, but that was impossible. After all, Tate was still in Fuuka. Tate...in this situation he would...

No!

She shook her head, trying to erase the distracting thought, and concentrated on the task at hand. She kept her Elements pointed towards her attacker just as the ice began to crack. She fired more shots at it but they were quickly growing obsolete. The golden eyes grew brighter while steam was emitted from the entirely frozen form. Water dripped down the melting, cracking ice.

“ANCHIN!” The inhuman monster screamed, flames dripping from her jaws. The icy prison broke while the ghost floated forward. Her body began to disappear and in its place…

Natsuki gasped as she took a step back out of reflex. There stood a towering purple armored, six-headed, hydra-like beast. All six of the heads turned towards her, snarling at her while twelve—no, fourteen yellow eyes were fixed onto her.

She was so screwed.

*~*~*~

Meanwhile, if an onlooker was to turn and watch the other battle transpiring on the rooftop, he or she would see and battle take place between two women whose style of fighting couldn’t be more dissimilar. One of them moved with practiced grace whose attacks were always quick and purposeful. Each slash with her naginata was executed with perfect precision of one who had mastered the weapon and martial art. The other’s style seemed more like a jumbled mess of different techniques that she had merged to fit her weapon. There one could see her strike out with something one might see from a hard styled karate practitioner followed by block of a softer style, perhaps from jujutsu or aikido. It was obvious that she was an undisciplined fighter who was more accustomed to street brawling than fighting a highly trained adversary.

Both sported a few wounds. Shizuru had, more than once, been surprised by the other’s brutality and the wild attacks. She was used to being pitted against martial artists who usually kept to traditional fighting etiquette and disciplined styles. She preferred to read her opponent’s moves and predict how to counter them. With Nao, however, that proved to be impossible just as the five angry cuts on her right arm along with a few others showed how she was unprepared for an opponent who fought dirty.

Despite this, she faired far better than Nao. The redhead was starting to slightly regret her impulse to attack. Shizuru was setting a tempo that she could barely follow and couldn't change. It was nearly impossible for her to keep up with someone using a weapon with far longer range than her own and she was already worn from her fight with Natsuki. She was exerting more energy trying to duck, dodge, and escape the weapon’s reach than its user did swinging it. And Shizuru had learned from her first attack to force the younger woman to keep her distance, away the range of her claws. Not just that, but she never gave her the time to fully utilize her wires. If she tried to step back and lengthen them—and then she had to aim as well—the golden brown haired woman would use that forever-extending blade to follow her or rush forward and attack.

Just like what she currently was doing.

Yuuki Nao had moved back, trying to steal a few seconds to breathe. Her arms fell to her side; the thin red wires connected to her weapon draped the rooftop surface. Shizuru had pursued.

This time, instead of attacking her head on, Shizuru spun her blade in her hands, changing her grip on the weapon before quickly jabbing the ishizuki (the metal counterweight) end of her weapon at the claw user. The purple tassels connected at the end of the ishizuki were swiped at Nao’s face as the red naginata was turned once more. It was meant to distract the other as the blade slashed upwards in an attack that could cut her opponent in half.

However, Nao was ready. Her wires connected to the pole just as it shot up and she threw the naginata straight up into the air, yanking the blade out of Shizuru’s hands. She shot the other a victorious smirk but was met with a powerful palm strike to her face.

Nao cried out in pain and fell to the ground, clutching her bleeding, but thankfully not broken nose. When she looked up, she saw the Kyoto native deftly catching the falling weapon and spinning it so that it faced her. She felt the cold blade pressed to her neck.

In the background, she spotted the huge purple Child that the ghost had turned into. She idly wondered whether or not she would want to switch positions with Natsuki. Maybe being torn apart and eaten by a giant snake-squid would be less painful than a death by the psycho naginata wielding woman.

…Nah.

“If I had Julia, I would’ve won.” Nao muttered, trying the control the urge to pout even in her current predicament.

“The outcome would have been the same.”

“Then hurry up and kill me to prove your point, whatever it is.” She retorted, still clutching her nose. Her green eyes glared defiantly at Shizuru’s empty ones.

There was a pause. At the same moment, Kiyohime stopped before her four of her mouths reached Natsuki who had been backed into a corner. Two of the snake heads had been completely frozen by the incessant shots fired by the blue haired woman.

Shizuru closed her eyes.

When they opened, the claret hued eyes were focused; she had regained control of herself. Her stance relaxed and her Element moved to her side and vanished. She turned away, unable to look at the younger woman she nearly killed.

“Natsuki is not worth bloodying my hands for.” She said.

Kiyohime turned, hissing at Shizuru. Apparently, the woman understood what the beast was saying because she simply replied:

“It no longer matters. We are leaving, Kiyohime.”

The ghost had no choice but to dip her many heads and fade away. That left Natsuki and Nao on the rooftop, just as wide eyed and shocked as they were when Shizuru first appeared.

*~*~*~

As Shizuru walked down the stairs of the department store, she idly thought that it would be prudent to get rid of the evidence of the fight. No doubt someone in the city had seen Kiyohime in her Child form and word would spread or, even worse, there would be a video. Not just that, if the police got blood samples, they could trace it back to her.

Her family was never above doing a few illegal tactics if they knew they could get away with it. Thus they always had a few clean up crews. She could probably borrow one to deal with what had transpired. Why not; she had her cellphone with her. She dialed a number.

“Hello? Ah Takamori-san, how are you?” She paused, listening to the other’s response.

“Yes, I have a favor to ask you. Would you and your team please clean up the rooftop of…that is correct. Here is the address,” she gave it before continuing. “It would be preferable if you use the same discretion which makes my father highly regard you as always. You may also want look at the emergency stairway because it seems I am bleeding—do not worry. I will be fine. Please hurry. …thank you. I will be in my office if you need me.” She closed her phone before the other could protest.

That being taken care of, she indiscreetly entered a bathroom on the fifth floor that she remembered being close to the stairs. Luckily it was empty. She first washed her hands as Nao’s blood was still on them before accessing her other injuries. Aside from her right arm where four wires left their rather deep imprint on, showing how they had wrapped around her arm, ready to slice the entire appendage off had Shizuru not extended her weapon’s chain-like blade and cut through the wires, there were only a few scrapes on her back she had to deal with. Shizuru was grateful that she had chosen today to wear pants instead of her customary skirt and darker colors.

Chances were if she continued down the stairs, she would find the emergency exit with a broken fire alarm. That was probably how Natsuki and Nao had entered. If not, hopefully she wouldn’t be noticed walking out of the front entrance. She glanced worriedly at her arm. Her entire right sleeve had been cleanly sliced off and the five individual cuts still bled. It would be hard to hide her wounds and now that her adrenaline had stopped, pain had returned full force.

Kiyohime had also disappeared. She knew almost by instinct that the ghost probably would return when she went back to her office. What a predicament.

She sighed deeply.

With a little luck and knowledge of less common pathways, she somehow managed to reach the company building with little trouble. From there she was safe. She didn’t have to go through the main doors and use the common elevators since there was a secret one at the back of the building near the obviously deactivated emergency exit. Her grandfather had it put in as he had a fondness of slipping away from unimportant meetings and paperwork. That same fondness seemed to have been inherited from generation to generation.

When she reached her office, she poured herself a cup of still hot tea. Yasuo probably had set it out for her before he left. Sitting down behind her desk, Shizuru mentally prepared herself. Any second now…

Five.

Four.

Three.

Two…

“Why did you stop?” Kiyohime hissed as she suddenly appeared in her scaly, grotesque form. She paused for a moment when she saw the golden brown haired woman laugh softly (Shizuru was evidently pleased at her prediction) before continuing, glaring angrily at the burgundy eyed woman who had long become immune to such looks. “You had her—you could have made her yours.”

Shizuru didn’t reply immediately. Instead she quietly drank her tea, letting the familiar taste pacify her nerves.

“I probably should have someone look at my injuries,” she said airily, more to herself than to the angry ghost. “Just to make sure Yuuki-san’s weapons were not poisoned. I wonder if our doctor will believe me if I said it was caused by a giant spider.”

She looked up to see the ghost shaking in rage at being ignored with a calm smile on her face. Perhaps she shouldn’t tease a thousand year old being whose powers she didn’t quite understand.

“Anchin was right there! You had him! You should have finished the other and taken Anchin! You—

“Please do not confuse me with yourself. I am not you nor is Natsuki Anchin.” She said, cutting off the ghost before she started ranting. Looking up at the rage-filled being, she continued:

“I think I understand how you exist. You drive your carrier into insanity with your manipulating words. You feed her despair until she is filled with desperation. She kills the one she loves and then herself at your goading. Then you subsist until you can leech off another maiden’s tears.”

The ghost had settled down during her short speech, returning to her most human-like form, and now sat on the edge of Shizuru’s desk.

“Perhaps that is true, Fujino Shizuru. But what are you to do?” She leaned forward with a deceptively sweet smile on her face. “Sooner or later you will go after Anchin again. Lie as much as you want to yourself, but you can not escape the extent of your love for him.”

“Her. Her name is Natsuki.” Shizuru corrected with a false smile before sipping her tea.

“Then you do not deny it. You will go after her again.” Kiyohime leaned closer; her cold breath could be felt on the Vice President’s face.

“As nice as it is to be so close to you, I believe we both agree that my heart belongs only to Natsuki. So please move or else I might get the wrong idea.” She laughed as the purple haired ghost quickly retreated back in surprise.

“You are a strange one.”

“As I have been constantly told,” she countered out of reflex before spinning the chair so she could look outside. She no longer saw the two figures on the rooftop who had put her into an enraged state and coerced the being that now sat near her out of her body.

“Please do not misunderstand me,” she said in her customary polite accent after a minute. “There is a reason why I left her. I have no intention of pursuing Natsuki any longer. Enough of my life has been wasted waiting for her grow up and I have suffered deeply for it. My pain is something you understand, do you not, Kiyohime?”

“You tied too much of yourself to her. Sooner or later, you will pursue her again.” The ghost said stubbornly. “They always do.”

Had she been anyone else, Shizuru would’ve scoffed. Instead she chided mildly: “I am not like your usual prey. Do not take me for your usual, severely love-struck teenager who barely understands how the world works. I am not governed by impulse or leashed to my emotions. I have grown.”

What she didn’t say was that she was lucky Kiyohime had chosen (or was only able) to speak to her now. Had it only been a few years before and after a prolonged exposure, things may have been vastly different.

Kiyohime only smiled mysteriously and replied in her archaic tongue. “Perhaps that is so. But you forget that I have been with you since you were that ‘love-struck teenager.’ I know your inner workings and desires.”

“Then would you please bring the teapot to me? It seems I have finished my cup.” Shizuru said, smiling innocently. She ignored how close the comment had hit her.

The ghost rolled her eyes but did what she was asked. What remained of the innkeeper’s daughter even poured the tea for her.

“Thank you.” She said politely before remarking, “I have been wondering how you do that.”

She was referring to how the ghost could become corporeal.

“Does it truly matter?”

“Not particularly, I was just curious.”

“Then hurry up and make your point. I can sustain this form only for so long.”

“You cannot control me, Kiyohime. You only can whisper in my ears what you want me to do. In truth, you must adhere to my wishes while you share my body. This is because you inhabit the form of an Orphan whom I have adopted as my own Child.” She clutched her left side where her scar was. “If I looked, would I now find the same mark that Natsuki and the others have?”

“Look for yourself; I have never inhabited the body of a non-HiME.” The ghost looked only slightly peeved when she saw the Vice President raise her eyebrow suggestively. That made Shizuru slightly disappointed.

When Kiyohime said nothing more, Shizuru goaded her slightly. “So it seems my assumptions are true since you have not replied.”

“Even if they are, what are you going to do? It seems you can neither take a step back nor forward. What are you going to do now, Fujino Shizuru?” She repeated before vanishing.

Kiyohime's last words echoed through the office. As it did, Shizuru stood up and turned to face the glass wall behind her. With a heavy sigh, she said:

“I do not know.”



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chapter 7
(Anonymous)
2007-02-26 01:33 am UTC (link)
Yay I was wondering if this story was going to resurface. This chapter is really well written although I'm a little confused when Natsuki says "but Tate is still in Fuka?" Wasn't she with Shizuru romantically before Shizuru left??? I hope you have a nice reunion planned for them sometime in the near future. I'll be waiting for you're next update!

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Re: chapter 7
[info]vinforspi
2007-02-26 03:00 am UTC (link)
Heh. ^___^ Thanks for the comment and I'm really sorry about that confusing line. In the manga, Tate is Natsuki's Key. In order for Natsuki to summon Duran, her Element would have to touch Tate by the laws of manga-verse. And Tate is still in Fuuka. Therefore, in her reasoning, Natsuki can't summon Duran in order to help her out which she obvious wants to do.

I guess the thought of Tate causes her to get distracted 'cuz there really isn't a conclusion between them. And Natsuki can't let herself get distracted because ~waves arms~ crazy stuff happening!

I hope that clears stuff up for you. Again, sorry about that--do you think it distracts from the overall chapter?

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[info]sayosi
2007-02-26 02:52 am UTC (link)
Ah, splendid as always~ You write gud very well and wonderfully. Stupid Tate and his key-ness. Can a HiME not change keys until they previous key is dead? Oh, and I went back and looked (because I'm apparently a masochist) back at the manga and it was Miyu that after, of course, slicing off almost all of Nao's clothes, smote (which I have now found out is that past tense of 'smite') Julia and made Nao's key go bye-bye in a very unpleasant way.

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[info]vinforspi
2007-02-26 03:14 am UTC (link)
^___^ Thank you for your kind comments! And I agree, stupid Tate and his key-ness! (and his self-inserty-ness) And uh, well...I'm not too sure. eh heh. but I could totally make Tate fall off a cliff and die in many unpleasant ways and still keep to the the um...versimilitude (is that the right word?) of the fic

o_O Smote? That sounds funny--always thought it was smited, but 'pparently isn't. ~tests~ Ahaha! I have smote the smoky bacon while...snorkeling with the remote! ~strikes a dramatic pose~ ...however that works.

Ooh. Well, at least I was...not at all close. Thanks for the correction. ^__^ It's been over a year since I read the manga (and totally tried to bleach it from brain) so my memory tis hazy about it.

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[info]sayosi
2007-02-26 03:29 am UTC (link)
You're welcome. And his sideburns. Don't forget the sideburns. I say nobody will oppose such a scene...maybe. Verisimilitude? *runs off to dictionary.com* The appearance or semblance of truth; likelihood; probability. I say it works.

Thought it was smited too, but the oh so nice built-in spell check in Firefox redified me otherwise. Would smiting smoky bacon while snorkeling with a remote make is soggy? ...And why a remote? Is it a smiting instrument?

I've tried to erase it from memory also, thus making me skim through 10 random chapters to find the needed scene...and stopping to squeal at the slightest appearance of Shizuru and running away screaming every time Tate was on the same page as Natsuki.

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[info]vinforspi
2007-02-26 04:26 am UTC (link)
~grabs a chainsaw~ Ooh Tate~ Tis time for a hair cut! ~cuts off his head~ Sideburns? What sideburns? I see no sideburns (or a head for that matters) ~whistles innocently~ kewl. Well if it doesn't, it would make for a fun omake--The 100 ways to kill a Tate!

Um...well it was never said what one was snorkeling in! See, one was...was...snorkeling in space? Air? In a white room with much padding in it--it wouldn't get soggy in there! And...a remote was the first thing I thought of that rhymed with smote.

...fine itsa a half/slant/whatever it is always called rhyme ~burns poetry terms~ Besides, anything can be a smiting instrument! If you're awesome enough you could smite duudes with a toothpick! @___@

~patpat~ My condolences...but at least you got come really good exercise? Sadly the kaichou-sama whose pure awesome-ness knows no limits doesn't appear nearly as much as Tate does with Natsuki so you musta been running and screaming muchies.

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[info]sayosi
2007-02-26 09:59 pm UTC (link)
Well, I suppose that's one way to get a hair cut; stops the hair from growing and all. Yes, omake. Save your readers from the angst pit! 100? I can imagine how creative those would have to get after awhile.

Personally I don't think a snorkel would help one survive in space, and I don't think you can swim/dive in air... But, ah, the padded white room that knows no boundaries. 'Tis very possible to prevent the sogginess in there.

Poetry know-how has also been vacated from the premises that is mah mind, so eh. Toothpick smiting surely takes a great amount of smite skillz. Do you have the powar?

Exercise, yes. So much so that I'm now rather sore. I swear if Shizuru could have gained Kiyohime in the manga and kicked Tate's ass in a fit of rage, it would have been just that much more bearable. Maybe even *GASPETH* enjoyable? The world will never know. Alas.

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[info]vinforspi
2007-02-27 12:19 am UTC (link)
~nods sagely~ Permanently! Of course 100! ...or maybe just 23. I like the number 23. And I'm sure there are plenty of ways to kill a Tate! Angst pit...is the fic really that angsty? ~glances worriedly~ B-but, it kinda has to be this way. I mean, itsa not going to be all sunshine and pretty flowers since I'm building off the one-shot which is ...uguu @__@

...but it makes for an awesome statement? Of what, I'm not too sure but maybe the other people in the padded white room will know. As for being able to swim/dive in air--Sky diving!

T____T ~has huge poetry presentation on Thursday~ Huh. Toothpick smiting is one of the final levels one must reach in order to become the being a master of smiting! Sadly I have not reached that level. It is because I had not smote the smoky bacon and all the good stuff. Have you gotsa za mad skillz? o_O

And that ish why there is fanfiction. ^___^

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[info]sayosi
2007-02-27 03:24 am UTC (link)
Only it may look like the hair is growing because the skin recedes...or something of the sort. Ah, the pleasantries of the post mortem (don't know if I used that right). Oh yes, there are indeed plenty of ways, such as a nail gun. Lethal, those things are. I've seen angstier, so no, not that angsty. It works for this and I don't mind the angst in the least. Makes for an excellent fic and 'all sunshine and pretty flowers' can get annoying after a while. This has a much more real feel to it, minus the uber powers and such...but the uber powers make it that much better.

Of course, awesome statement of awesomeness that would make most people go "WTF was that?" Sky diving, how could I forget? It's pushing things, but diving is in the name. ...Fine.

Good luck! *gives thumbs up* Does smiting make things crispy or are they just vaporized? Perhaps there are different kinds of smiting. Sadly, I only have a white belt in the Smiting Powars. I have much to learn.

Yes, wonderful fanfiction. I'm hoping for eventual Tate smiting, but if it doesn't happen then I may be forced to write cracky crack...at some point. Gah to the full plate!

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[info]vinforspi
2007-02-28 04:29 am UTC (link)
Really? I didn't know that either. Sounds interesting. Aaand, I can't help ya there because I didn't take Latin. Nail gun...sounds promising. But then again, in theory, you could kill anyone with just about anything. >.< That's good because I don't want angst for like...angst sake. Must have point and reasoning behind everything! Tis also very awesome that you think fic has a real feel to it. And nothing is complete without adding a good dosage of uber powers!

~grins~ That would be because such awesomeness that knows not of limits cannot be fathomed by the normal folk! For it is just that awesome of a statement! And...yeah. It's very much pushing things because it's kinda like one of those things you make up on impulse and then when trying to back it up...well all you can do ish BS? @___@

>.< Sankyuu. Uh...there are many styles of smiting! I am only begining to learn how to smite others with the Attack of...of...Pure Randomness? Perhaps one day I shall be able to smite stuff with my mind and make them...explode? uguu...probably should quit before I lose all mah credibility. Then again, I would have to have it in order ta lose it. XPXPXP

Yay for writing "cracky crack!" And please do when you have time for there is not enough smiting of the Tate. Or maybe there is, and fireclaw doesn't know because she's horrible slow at life reading fanfics. ^___^

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[info]sayosi
2007-02-28 10:57 pm UTC (link)
This is what I get for reading books with a medical examiner as the main character. I learn things, but the retaining needs work. Yes, anything, but I'm having trouble with a sheet of paper... Paper cuts? Crunching it up into a ball and then making someone choke on it? O.o I've just realized how utterly morbid my mind is. Yes, reasoning is very good. If angst is just there, it's not a good story and will entice the wrong kind of anger. The uber combination of realism and uber powers is...UBER!!!! I fear for my creativity.

Of course! *is not so ironically wearing her "normal people scare me" shirt* BS-ing things has the chance of actually working out quite nicely. I've passed many a essay by BS-ing in a smart-ish way. It could work out if you start making analogies between the air and the water among other...things.

The Attack of Pure Randomness? Ah yes, one can confuse one's opponent to the point of mass confusion and then-OH!-an opening for teh mighty smiting! Making things implode is fun too, only I think that may create black holes and those aren't good. Credibility? Bah, who needs that? As long as one can, well, BS with conviction, it is unecessary. Unless it's and important issue, then not so much.

I can't think of any smiting of the Tate fics. There were two stories that poked fun at the manga, but that was it as far as I know and I read a decent amount of fanfiction. Ah, I shall try, but first there must be brainstorming! *WHOOSH*

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[info]vinforspi
2007-03-02 03:30 am UTC (link)
Oooh what book? ~curious~ The crunching up in the ball and shoving it in a duude's mouth works. Or if the paper is thick enough you can just put it over face and have them suffocate on it. But that would be harder to do, in theory. And um...you're not the only one? I've played this game with myself countless times. I always get stuck on a strand of hair. >.< Help? And yesh! Plus the story just seems really childish and not well thought out. That's okies, it's not like mine's much better. Most of the time, mah diction is limited to "awesome."

Duude! I want that shirt! So awesome. XP XP And so have I? It's just you have to be careful and not contradict yourself. But...I could...b-but...that would take effort! And goodness forbid that ever happening. XP

Ah, gotta watch out for those natsy black holes when using mad smiting powers. Last thing you want to do is open a rift between universes and cause crazy things to happen. ~waves arms wildly~ Like like a place where there are angry shark people hellbent on eating bandwagons, not realizing it's not tangible. And thus they end up cannabalizing everyone and everything and, man, I wouldn't want to be there. ...ah yesh, I like it here in the spacious room that is of fireclaw's mind.

Hehe...then um, help me figure out at least 23 ways to smite/kill/maim/destroy/etc. a Tate! And together with our morbidly awesome minds of innovation, we shall create the original entity that is of smiting many a Tate fic! ^__________^

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[info]sayosi
2007-03-02 04:04 am UTC (link)
Ah, various books, all by Patricia Cornwell with her character Chief Medical Examiner Kay Scarpetta. I see that now. Yay for company! Strand of hair? Well, I've almost coked on my hair on multiple occasions, so perhaps if you angle it correctly down a person's throat... But 'awesome' is awesome. And your supposed lack of diction certainly doesn't show in your writing.

I, uh, got it at Target? Or was it Khols... I think you have. Effort? How horrible of a thing it is. *le sigh* It's so much nicer when things just come to you.

Your imagination...ish wonderful. I bow down to the mastah.

Let's see, I'm partial to the stable gun, though I'm not sure why. He could choke on paper/strand of hair, be smothered in his sleep by a pillow, bleed to death from castration, have Shizuru 'accidentally' put poison in his food, have Mikoto 'accidentally' chop his head off, bludgeoned by a printer, stampeded over by a mass of Shizuru fangirls, suffocated by duct tape over nose and mouth, somehow swallowed by Kiyohime... This is, well, oh my.

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[info]vinforspi
2007-03-02 04:42 am UTC (link)
Sankyuu! I must try to find those books the next time I visit the library. Yesh, indeedness! It's been far too long since I have found a kindred (violent) spirit. Salutations-ness! Yeah, I've done that a couple times myself, but it seems rather hard to actually die from it. Maybe if you have multiple strands of hair that would work. ~nods~ Awesome is very awesome! My 11AP teacher last year said itsa called "writer's vocabulary" where one suddenly comes up with words that she didn't realize she knew before and they totally work in the specific context."

I've never been to Target. But um...Kohls? eeek, however you speel that...they do have awesome comment-y shirts. ^__^ Something I have not of. And yeah, I rather just live off epiphanies.

Deshou, deshou? Isn't is just suteki? ~has dreamy look and room fills up with shoujo bubbles~ ... ~bubbles pop and fireclaw drowns, just because~

I've always been a pressure point gal myself. Gotta love the many pressure points of the human body. Nao could do that. It would be like...the fireclaw version of that one disgusting Nao scene with Tate. LOL by the death of the Shizuru fangirls. I can see it now. Shizuru just sighs and mutters to herself how much she wishes Tate would disappear. And then her crazy obsessed (can't blame them) fangirls with their accute hearing hears it and like...smites him with their devote, cult-like loyalty to the one and only kaichou. There's always the chainsaw, and the old classic butcher knife. Ooh, novelty rubber chicken! There must always be a novelty rubber chicken!

...eh heh. Oh my indeed. I'm a totally nice and kind person. ~whistles innocently and fails~

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[info]sayosi
2007-03-02 05:32 pm UTC (link)
I should warn you that there is a slight order that they probably should be read in. Sometimes characters die and that carries over, and there are references to past cases. Her site has a nice timeline-ish thing, but not all books are Kay Scarpetta, as Cornwell does branch out a little. Well, then, right back at cha! w00t! I think a strand of hair (by itself without any modifications) is near impossible to kill with. But multiple strands, yesh. Oh, I see! I've done that too. Only I often have to look up the definition to see if I'm using it even slightly right. Gah.

Ah yes, Kohls. That 'h' hates me, I swear it does. And most of their comment/saying shirts are usually on clearance, so yays for cheapness! Because if one lives off epiphanies, things are just that much better in life.

Drowns? Don't make me do CPR, because I can't quite remember all the steps. Health was too long ago...

Hm, yes, pressure points. I heard from someone long ago that there was a specific pressure point on your head that could make it explode...or at least kill you. Not sure if that's correct or not. I believe Nao is quite mischievous enough to pull such a thing off. Fangirls, when loyalty is truly lethal. Wheeee~ But how would he die by novelty rubber chicken? Choking? Smacking? Shoving up certain orifices? Suddenly coming to life and plucking to death?

I can't even whistle, so there goes all my innocence. Oh wait, the smiling! *smiles innocently* ...But alas.

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ippiki_ookami
2007-02-26 03:06 am UTC (link)
Oh damn! AAAAAAHHHH it's here! YESH! You don't know how badly I've been wanting to see an update and I'm so happy right now ^________^

Whoa....so Tate is still considered a key, huh. Heh, I guess that really does complicate things even further. ^^;;


Gah....."Kiyohime" *Drooooooooooool*

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[info]vinforspi
2007-02-26 03:18 am UTC (link)
Haha. Thanks, comment made me grin like the maniac fireclaw sometimes is. Really sorry about by really bad updating/writing ethics. Will try better next time!

eh heh ~nods~

Kiyohime love!!

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ippiki_ookami
2007-02-27 12:12 am UTC (link)
Really sorry about by really bad updating/writing ethics. Will try better next time!

Meh...there's no need for you to apologize. Update when you can...that's all I could say. ^^

Heh, I read Shizuru-sama's response...wow! That's passion for ya....very moving and inspiring too. ^_^....yes, we all want a happy ending for both our heroines but I believe that they must overcome the harsh obstacles that get in their way...and in life, there are always obstacles. And by doing that, it allows them to grow and well...if they truly belong to each other (of course they do LOL), then they will definitely find there way back to each others arms....and their relationship will be even stronger than ever.

Because love alone doesn't solve anything. It's the act of forgiveness that does. Because without it, neither will be able to let go of their existing issues. The act of forgiveness can transform a person and make them even better than before. Gah! what the hell? I got this from today's episode of fricken General Hospital...okay someone shoot me now -_-;;....stupid Luke Spencer.

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[info]vinforspi
2007-02-27 01:01 am UTC (link)
XP XPXPXP Thanks.

I know! >.< Her insights are so beyond awesome, they are...really awesome! ~has limited diction~ I mean ~cough~ I was totally thinking in the same line when I was figuring out the plot and story progression...

^__^;;; anyway...

You're right. In life, there's always obstacles you have have to face and hoops to jump over. It's how you face them that makes you become a stronger person. And by doing makes you more dependable and someone others can lean on. Sun Wu/Tzu says something along those lines. Something like "know yourself and your enemy and you will not fear the results of a hundred battles." It kinda fits in context and, well, it's not like you can keep them apart. Their love is INBINCIBLE! urgh, I can't believe I saything stuff like that. ~shoots self~

And it totally doesn't matter where you got if from, it's a nice sentiment that I totally agree with. It seems something really simple, the act of forgiving, but the impact is amazing. ~grins~

Excuse me as I go watch something with lots of explosions and fighting because I'm turning into an utter sap.

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[info]shizuru_sama
2007-02-26 05:33 am UTC (link)
I went back and re-read the whole story again and I believe that it doesn't matter if Tate is close to her or not, the reason she cant' summon Duran is because she's is confuse. She does care for Shizuru very much and after what happen between Mai and Tate, the kissing scene, and the coming after Shizuru, I have reason to believe Shizuru will soon be her key.

It sting the corner of my heart witnessing how cold Shizuru act toward Natsuki but in a way, Natsuki kind of deserve it too. You won't know how important someone is until they're out the door and I think Natsuki is beginning to pick it up. After all, Natsuki has something to tell Shizuru when she came and see her but Shizuru wouldn't let her talk. It just ended there....Poor Natsuki. Poor Shizuru.

“Natsuki is not worth bloodying my hands for.”..OUCH! That hurts. I hate to see Shizuru so cold and I pray for a good reunion in near future. I'm scare that Natsuki will never has the guts to come back and see Shizuru again...because Shizuru doesn't want to see her. HOw are they gonna reunite??? This is something for me 'not to know' and for you to figure out...heheheeee...

I really dislike(or say 'hate) Tate and I don't understand who Natsuki is attractive to someone so perveted like him. If Mai wants him, let her.
Someone is better waiting for her...Natsuki you-baka! For some reason, this word is too old.

I haven't forgot about the story but I forgot the plot, so I went back and read the whole story. You know all those Shiznat stories makes me confuse....but your's not at ff.net so it's differ.

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[info]vinforspi
2007-02-26 06:25 am UTC (link)
^___^

I love your insights, as always. And, well, I think the scene you're mentioning is in D5, no? In that chapter, Natsuki doesn't have anything to say, really. She's still really confused which is why even though Shizuru kept cutting her off--Natsuki never forced herself to be heard because she couldn't think of anything to say. At that period, she still understands little. ^__^; I agree, poor Shizuru and Natsuki.

Ah, well...sooner or later Natsuki's going to have to learn. As for me to figure out...um--should I say that last line in this chapter goes for me as well? >.< kinda sorta... ~sighs~ I going to hate writing D8.

I despise manga Tate. The anime one I tolerate. But I agree, I don't see what Mai or Natsuki sees in him. He's just...stupid and deserves to die. Not just is he untolerable, uncool...he's so boring and predicable. You can figure out what he says ten lines before he says it. ~rolls eyes~

....but your's not at ff.net so it's differ.

Sorry, but I don't think I understand what your saying here. It might just be it's really late and my brain isn't functioning.

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[info]shizuru_sama
2007-02-26 07:01 am UTC (link)
....'but your's not at ff.net so it's differ...' this I means that since your story was no posted over there, there's a distinguish since I read a lot of stories over at that site so it sometime confuses me and even to the point I don't remember which story is which....Sorry, to confuse you here, you can disregard this line...Long story short, it's easy to forget what a story is about when you read hundreds of them....

So, does this means that she just wanna see Shizuru and come what may, take the challenge of being stupid in front of Shizuru. Love is so complicated! *sighs* I guess Natsuki is the type of person that take action before think and when she's there, she starts to panic...something like this.

Is Natsuki over that ugly guy yet? Her full attention is on Shizuru now, right? Hahhaaaa...somehow that's sound so easy to say. She's being around Shizuru too much that without the other girl presences, she's starting to miss her smell.

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[info]vinforspi
2007-02-26 08:17 pm UTC (link)
Ah, gotcha. ^__^;; Sorry about my confusion.

Um...yesh? If you kinda remember, taking a step back to D4, Natsuki kinda acts upon impulse and says to Yasuo something about wanting to see Shizuru. The duude then arranges a time for her and she really doesn't have a choice but to show up even though she still doesn't know what the heck is happening. Thus she was totally unprepared for what was soon going ta transpire w/her an' Shizuru. The anime Natsuki seemed rather impulsive, though manga Natsuki seemed really really impulsive...from what I vaguely remember. So I guess made it a really defining characteristic in Delirium Natsuki because it works well for the fic while, hopefully, she still remains in character. ~paranoid about making characters OOC~

^___^ Miss her smell indeedness. ~giggles~

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One more thing...
[info]shizuru_sama
2007-02-26 05:49 am UTC (link)
I agree with Kiyohime...No matter what, Natsuki has been a part of her life and sooner or later, she'll find her way back to reunite with the other girl. I find it interesting that Kiyohime refers Natsuki to Anchin...I know about the Kiyohime story, but this part just amuses me to no end.

I'm a little confuse with Shizuru's behaviour. She said she has no intention of going after Natsuki and Kiyohime disagreed with her. Then she point out that:

“As nice as it is to be so close to you, I believe we both agree that my heart belongs only to Natsuki."

I think Shizuru is confuse and broke at some point and she make herself to believe that she no longer care for Natsuki. What she's saying contradict the part where she say she belong only to Natsuki. What is she up to?

Surly, she know Kiyohime feels her pain because the Child was born from her will/desire, therefore, she must not deny the fact of Kiyohime's words, that she still loves and care for the other girl. The Child repeats "You will go after her again" a couples times and Shizuru couldn't or didn't answer the Child and change the subject....Whatever it maybe it, let it be...I just want to see a how it continue...

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Re: One more thing...
[info]vinforspi
2007-02-26 06:42 am UTC (link)
Heh. In some kind've way, that is rather sad...isn't it? That a person can become so attached to another that she couldn't live without that person? It would be worse if you know that your feelings would never be returned and yet...life goes on and you could never get over it. There's that desperation that remains unchangable, and even when your with that person, if he/she knows it...it's just uncomfortable. Once you passed that line, you can't go back. You can't move forward because you refuse--you can't let go. Rather tragic, the story of Kiyo.

...as for Kiyohime referring to Natsuki as Anchin ~jokes~ Well, she's rather old and well...after a couple hundred years she's probably senile. It's not like she can remember every love interest's name. ~grins~ Poor ol' senile Kiyohime. ~laughs at the image of a six headed, white bearded snake-child~

As for Shizuru's behaviour...she realizes her "predicament." She knows that she still loves Natsuki very much but is realizes she's destroying herself from the inside because she's staying with someone that doesn't love her. So she belongs only to Natsuki, but she can't stay with her...does that make sense?

And don't trust everything that Kiyohime says. She has her own agenda. She want Shizuru to go after Natsuki and likely kill her and then herself in the process because she's a ghost that feeds off the emotions and then remaining life force of the person? And Shizuru doesn't want to answer because, as she says, she "does not know" what her next move is. ^__^

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Re: One more thing...
[info]vinforspi
2007-02-26 06:51 am UTC (link)
ack. continuing with the last sentiment. I forgot to add something about Shizuru's reasoning. As you can see, she's an older, wiser, and way more jaded Shizuru than the 18 year-old from the anime. She looking forward to the future. I guess she's very aware of the legend surrounding Kiyohime and doesn't want that to happen to her. She's trying to avoid her own destruction which is why she stops herself from killing Nao. The fact that she left Natsuki is important in her eyes. She's trying to distance herself and then cut herself off. Going after her is the last thing she wants to do. Does that make sense?

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Re: One more thing...
[info]shizuru_sama
2007-02-26 07:32 am UTC (link)
But regarding everything that happens in the story, Shizuru cannot really believe that NAtsuki doens't love her. It's tough being the second person in a three wheel relationship, and I am sure Shizuru is aware that Mai is slightly more important to Tate than is Natsuki so somewhat Natsuki has a taste of what it feels like to be a second person. Natsuki vs. Mai. I hope Natsuki realizes this too and reflects this feeling upon herself, of how hard it was for Shizuru to be the second person waiting for her to return as she does with Tate (and hopefully by now, Tate is buried in the fog since Natsuki is busy finding 'what it means to be with Shizuru).

I think (no I'm sure) I understand what you mean when said "she belongs to Natsuki, but she can't stay with her" but a part of me is very stubborn and doesn't want to see that reasoning. The other part of me reasons with this... If she can't be with Natsuki then she can't belong with her because 'belonging' means being together and apparently Shizuru choses to walk again. However, her heart and memories still remains, therefore, it's hard for her to move on even if she tries with all her will-power...So with this being say, I'm incline to think that with when she say she belong with Natsuki she means her life is part with the young girl,memories, life, and love, came from knowing Natsuki. Therefore, her heart will always belong to Natsuki...

ARGGHHH, I'm talking too much...I hope I didn't bring in any problem...I'll just shut up wait. Shizuru's love for Natsuki is so unique...She loves Natsuki but she can't be with her. And being with her will even deepen her wound...can't pretend you dont' see nothing when it's all crystal clear.
Everyone has a heart and it hurts most when you love someone. Natsuki doesn't know a lot about love. She may think she does but I think in order for her to know, she must allow herself to be love and what she's doing, it seems that she love but doesn't know what it means.

And yes, the Shizuru in the manga is different from the one in the anime, as you said. The more I talk the more I want to find out what chapter 8 is gonna be about. So, good luck with your next chapter. I'll be waiting :D



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Re: One more thing...
[info]shizuru_sama
2007-02-26 07:37 am UTC (link)
*sigh* I hope I make any senses...I may be missing some words because I'm so tired right now and my brain might not function as much as I wanted. Need some sleep.

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Re: One more thing...
[info]vinforspi
2007-02-26 08:53 pm UTC (link)
Regarding the make sense-ness...you do perfectly! Besides, I'm not one to talk because I'm always missing words because I type too fast and think too fast for my fingers to catch up on. And I'm just careless like no other. ^__^ Hope you got your needed sleep because sleep is super important and...fireclaw will shut up now before she says something hypocritical.

Alright, starting on the whole "Shizuru cannot really believe that Natsuki doesn't love her" paragraph. Well, you're only looking at it from Shizuru's perspective, no? In the same vein, can't you also understand that how, back in high school, Shizuru is aware that Tate is more important to Natsuki than she is? I'm sure that Shizuru believes that Natsuki loves her, but, well...to what degree? As a friend? Lover? Something in between? There are many types of love, ne? The anime does a great job of pointing that out. This Natsuki has been doing a lot of catch up reflecting lately. ^__^ Hope she finally clears up everything that's bothering her so she can grow up-ish.

I hope Natsuki realizes this too and reflects this feeling upon herself, of how hard it was for Shizuru to be the second person waiting for her to return as she does with Tate (and hopefully by now, Tate is buried in the fog since Natsuki is busy finding 'what it means to be with Shizuru).

Well, like I've said before: we've been only looking at this from Shizuru's perspective. We're putting Shizuru as Kiyohime and Natsuki as Anchin. But what if Natsuki was Kiyohime and Tate was Anchin? Besides the thought it utterly disgusting and creepy (and totally never ever...evereverever going to happen) you can see how stuff like this can go both ways. Depends on how you look at it. 'sides ~grins~ I guess itsa kinda clear in this chapter that Natsuki still has issues with Tate. Actually, it was clear since the first one.

The other part of me reasons with this... If she can't be with Natsuki then she can't belong with her because 'belonging' means being together and apparently Shizuru choses to walk again. However, her heart and memories still remains, therefore, it's hard for her to move on even if she tries with all her will-power...So with this being say, I'm incline to think that with when she say she belong with Natsuki she means her life is part with the young girl,memories, life, and love, came from knowing Natsuki. Therefore, her heart will always belong to Natsuki...

^____^ That's probably a better way of explaining what I was trying to say. She believes that her heart will always belong to Natsuki and thus her very being, more or less, but well...there're many ISSUES!! ~waves arms~ What's she going to do?

And not at all. I find it very interesting and I like listening to what others have to say. It gives me an idea how to flesh out my next plans as well as tie up any loose ends other people point out. People talking much and pointing stuff out ish good for me! ^___^ Helps me improve my writing and think outside what I usually do. So please, talk and wonder as much as you want! besides if you 'shut up and wait' it might be a loooooong time before stuff clears up.

Everyone has a heart and it hurts most when you love someone. Natsuki doesn't know a lot about love. She may think she does but I think in order for her to know, she must allow herself to be love and what she's doing, it seems that she love but doesn't know what it means.

Exactly! That is just about the premise of mah fic. other than the fact fireclaw can't do anything normally and just has to write a break apart a pairing instead of creating one

^___^ Thanks again and...hang in there? I'll try my best to get D8 done in a more...timely manner.

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[info]ifuritka
2007-02-26 10:16 am UTC (link)
Yay! Update! And so cool one. You broke my calm. Again. In the positive way :).

Pokemons? They fit. Because MH is another pokemon story. Only pokemons are cooler than Pikachu ;D

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[info]vinforspi
2007-02-26 09:04 pm UTC (link)
>.< Thanks for the kind words. Glad I could be of some help, I think? ~blinks~

LOL. I guess it is. Instead of trying to catch 'em all, it's more like kill them all and become the Pokemon Master Queen of Hell! Pikachu has nuthing 'gainst any of the Childs. Duran would pwn it and Kiyohime will just tear it apart and eat it! O___O ~patpats Kiyohime~ Though she might get indigestion.

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[info]arnavon_san
2007-02-26 10:07 pm UTC (link)
So, and I quote, 'but I could totally make Tate fall off a cliff and die in many unpleasant ways and still keep to the the um...verisimilitude of the fic.' Could this be done? You'd get no complaints from me. In fact, I'm wondering if there's a way to have him eaten alive by something. Would be very satisfying.

Picky time~

‘framed by crown of dark purple hair’- a crown, I think
‘Like she hand transcended the gap’- had
‘I had enough of this tirade’- I’ve had
‘would foolhardy keep going’- That looks odd. Uh…foolhardedly? Is that a word? Hopefully, since I don’t see how else one could turn that into an adverb.
‘She could feel the cold breathe’- breath
‘pure hatred that radiated her entire form’- radiated from
‘which pass through the body’- passed
‘she was lucky Kiyohime chosen’- had chosen’

Okay, so, with that done... Wooooo! So, so happy. Well, for the update. The content... That struck a chord. Because I understand Shizuru's reasoning, and I wish I didn't. Kiyohime isn't the threat so much as her own resolve, and I wish it would crumble. But at the same time, the chances she'd risk the same vulnerability...

And Natsuki. Oh Natsuki. I have a bad feeling about this. The fangirl in me thinks there should be some sort of definitive choice, like...if she could save just one... In short, Tate needs to die. Badly. But I can wait.
~Naolin

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ippiki_ookami
2007-02-27 12:05 am UTC (link)
So, and I quote, 'but I could totally make Tate fall off a cliff and die in many unpleasant ways and still keep to the the um...verisimilitude of the fic.' Could this be done?

... In short, Tate needs to die. Badly.

Ummm...yeah...I second this motion...he (Tate) REALLY *needs* to die. *waves a "Kill Tate the bonehead" banner furiously* ^^;;...yes yes I probably need professional help.

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[info]vinforspi
2007-02-27 02:26 am UTC (link)
Um, I guess but it would ruin the pacing? Urgh...~thinks~ Well, if not, there's always the omake. ^__^

Annnd Changed! Thanks so much for your help, as always. Especially this time since I didn't go through it as much as I did other chapters. Glad you liked it...the content, that ish. And I'm glad that struck a chord because that means I'm doing an ok job telling the story. You saying that means a lot to me. I'm really surprised at how much thought people are putting in. Tis very nice and makes me happy.

~drums fingers~ Ah, well. eh...heh. We'll see?

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[info]xavacid
2007-03-03 01:12 pm UTC (link)
I can't wait to see what Kiyohime's going to try next and, especially what Natsuki was going to do, when she had Shizuru saying that she wasn't worth it anymore. Must've been a big blow to her. I hope she get another chance, or rather, I hope Shizuru gives her another chance.

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